Changing Led For Mechanical Pencil
I open my pencil case
I look at my new Mechanical Pencil, which I just bought it
It looks so beautiful and gorgeous
It's shiny at me
I'm going to use it for my homework
I was doing my homework as usual
Suddenly my homework stop working
I can't believe it
It's my mechanical pencil stop working
I observed my pencil closely
I keep pressing the button
It won't work at all
How am I suppose to do my homework without them?!
It's gotta work somehow
so I keep pressing
My finger was tired and full of sweat
I am still pressing
I went to my mother, she say she is busy cooking
I ask my father, he say he is busy working
I ask my sister, she say she is busy writing
I ask my brother, he call me stupid
How you gonna fix it, my brother?!
He take away my pencil, and take a small thing out of his pencil case
He open my pencil's lid, and put a long, thing, black thing inside the lid
I am surprised!
The pencil actually work!
I ask my brother how you do it, he say-
It's call Changing Led For Mechanical Pencil, you stupid!
I open my pencil case
I look at my new Mechanical Pencil, which I just bought it
It looks so beautiful and gorgeous
It's shiny at me
I'm going to use it for my homework
I was doing my homework as usual
Suddenly my homework stop working
I can't believe it
It's my mechanical pencil stop working
I observed my pencil closely
I keep pressing the button
It won't work at all
How am I suppose to do my homework without them?!
It's gotta work somehow
so I keep pressing
My finger was tired and full of sweat
I am still pressing
I went to my mother, she say she is busy cooking
I ask my father, he say he is busy working
I ask my sister, she say she is busy writing
I ask my brother, he call me stupid
How you gonna fix it, my brother?!
He take away my pencil, and take a small thing out of his pencil case
He open my pencil's lid, and put a long, thing, black thing inside the lid
I am surprised!
The pencil actually work!
I ask my brother how you do it, he say-
It's call Changing Led For Mechanical Pencil, you stupid!
Hey Ken,
ReplyDeleteI read your blog post, and found it quite entertaining. You did great at using epic language to build drama, especially at the climax. It was pretty funny, but you could have made it flow more smoothly.